Friday, March 26, 2010

Cheryl's Fanfiction

Mr and Mrs Smith

This is a Transformers version of Mr and Mrs Smith. But it is in modern Julie and Romeo.

After the happy couple Mr and Mrs Smith died. They reborn turn to live version of transformer. They are both reborn to Roberts. John turns to ‘Optimus Prime’ renamed: Alex and Jane turns to ‘Megatron’ renamed: Angela. Of course, they don’t know each other in the beginning. But, they are the couple who fade to be together.

They are living very happy in their own world, which are two different planets. Each planet had their leaders and they are resisting to other planet. But in this century, each planet can be connect easily and convenience. Just like what we use now, such as MSN and bbs etc. Roberts in planet are very clever. They already know how to operate a computer when they born. The princess of Water Planet Angela meets the prince of Fire Planet Alex incidentally. They start to communicate with sending photos from their selves to each other. They both felt a kind of fall in love with each other. But they did not tell each other the truth, which are they came from different planet. They just did not even talk about these.

‘‘What do you think about meJ?’’ said Angela.
Angela is kind of nervous while waiting Alex’s answer.

‘‘er… I don’t know how to describe myself..I think..I ..I just feel very comfortable and happy when I talk with you.’’ said Alex.

That is what Angela felts too. Even they both are roberts, but they all had feelings as normal human.

After they talked with each other few months later, Alex is advance to go out with Angela.

‘‘Yes, I would like to’’ Angela is agree. So, where do we meet?

‘‘How about tomorrow 11 o’clock in the main gate of the Mystery Land?’’ asked Alex.
‘‘Mystery Land? Where is it? I have never heard about this place before. ’’ Angela has wondering.

‘‘Are you not coming from Fire planet? Where do you come from?’’ Alex is worry that she is not come from with same planet as he. If this is true, they should be not being able to continue with this relationship. He does not want to.

‘‘Angela? Angela? ’’ Alex got no answer from Angela. He does not know. Angela was crying and crying. She is so upset. WHY?? Angela asked herself again and again. She thinks that is not fair. This is the first time she felts love. And she pays a lot of passion in this relationship. She cannot understand that why is she that not lucky. She likes Alex very much.

They both do not want to see this happened. But the truth is they fall in love with each other, and cannot leave without each others.

Alex was to falling into valley. He has an idea. But it is not very easy to become realize. He does not need everything but Angela. He said to Angela:‘‘ Wait for me. I will come, for you.’’ Angela saws, but she did not give any answer to Alex. She is also try her best to think about how can she and Alex been together.

In each of their family, there was a war going on. Their parents start getting known of this happens. They totally disagree with this.

Angela had been locked in her room by her mum. She gets no internet and that makes she had no contact with any others. Alex leaves his planet to go looking for Angela with a note. It was a long long journal, from a planet to go another planet. On the way to Water Planet, Alex gets hurt by water. He comes to be black and blue all over the body and nearly dead. Angela was heard some information from the entrance guard. That the one she loved comes to find her. She was so happy but worried.
She cannot just wait anymore. She starts to rebel against. Yelled, trying to open the door with many different tool but nothing changed for her.

She knows, there is someone is with her on the other side of this world. She is not alone. Someone name Alex is fighting for her.

Gradually, more and more people start to getting known of this. Some are so furious but some are just feels touch emotionally for them.

No one knows what the result of these two couple is. No one sees them anymore. No one knows is Alex died or not. Even Angela has no idea about this. Alex had disappeared. Angela thoughts Alex wad died. Angela’s heart suddenly turns to cold. She had no more passion to everything. She just lost her feeling. No pain, no happy. Only one thing she had in mind, which is a boy named Alex.

8 comments:

  1. what a said story, love can happened between any people even come from different planet. no one could stop it or try to stop it. i want to know more about the ending, hope they will meet in the future.

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  3. Reality said...
    I couldn't really find any interest in it. Must be bcos I only know the story of Transformers. I could see quite a few of grammar mistakes. Yeah.. but good job =)

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  4. I like happy ending stories but this is a sad one. I was confused by the word "Roberts". (Robots or the name Roberts?)
    Also, speech mark is missing in the middle part of the story.
    But I think your fanfic is quite nice. :)

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  5. I have a really familiar feeling when reading this, like I am watching an old fashion Taiwan TV drama.
    There are a few misspelling words.
    Maybe because the word limits, I also feel the story didn't expand enough.
    But still, nice work!

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  6. What a attractive story, even I didn't see orignal one. However, it got some grammar mistakes and some puntuation got wrong, but don't worry, fix them and keep going on.It's a nice love story.

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  7. I've seen those movies, and actually this is quite interesting! I thought they don't go well together. I'm not a good English writer so I cannot comment on your grammar or spelling mistakes sorry -if you have any haha

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  8. what a sad story, love can happened between any people even come from different planet. no one could stop it or try to stop it. i want to know more about the ending, hope they will meet in the future.

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